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the dragon cronicles by ~barduk4:iconbarduk4:



this is a little story i brewed in my imagination for some time enjoy it ^^



it's not easy to make life changing choices. i know this because i've faced them before, my name is barduk and i live in a small town called aeris, its a nice place not many people live here but we got all we need in it, mr warburton sells the fruits he grows in his farm, mr larry sells meat... he's a though and scary guy, and there are many others from blacksmith to wavers...

my story begins while i was a young boy of 13, i was a good boy at least for the people i knew... i was known throughout the town for being a nice boy who helped anytime i could, never asking money back. adults seem to like that kind of attitude.

the day was scorching hot when i woke up. the sun burned loudly on the sky, i felt like not wearing clothes today because it was so hot, it must've been over 40... after i got dressed i decided to go outside it was a great day to visit the lake, so i departed to the cliffs, its very hard to get to the lake but i've been going to them since i was 10 so im very familiar with the place.

it didnt take long till i arrived at the cliff it was a high cliff maybe a few hundred feet tall, but i never really minded the height people would tell im gutsy so im not afraid of those things. i did the usual path and walked through the cliffs side making sure with my feet the tiny path would not collapse. the rocks supported me with rocks that made it possible to grab with my hand. it was wondorous how the cliff looked like it was built so others would climb, i chuckled at the fact and continued my way through the cliffside.

it wasnt long till i reached the lake, unscratched i removed some of my clothes wearing my trousers i jumped into the lake, it was nice and cool. my body relaxed as the refreshing cool water washed my sweat away, right that time i felt thet i died and went to heaven, i decided after awhile to get out of the lake it had been enough for me. so i went to my favorite spot... it was a pretty place with the most beautiful view of all laevur. if one day i get a girlfriend i'd bring her here, it's a perfect scenery for a kiss maybe.

i was enjoying the view when i heard a wierd noise coming from one of the cliffs below the cliff side. curiosity struck me like a hunter's arrow strikes a wild rabbit, i walked over to find a cave entrance. Funny i had never seen a cave here before, maybe i never paid attention.

i entered slowly making sure it was safe, i checked for traces of wild animals that may live in here. luckily for me no ber wolf or any other kind of animal lives here. even though this is a large cliff there are some wild animals living here. you can never be to careful mom says...

as i walked into the cave i stared in amaze as the walls began to reveal wierd looking symbols or runes, whatever they were i couldnt understand them, more ahead i noticed a dim light shining brightly at the end of the narrow corridor. this place looked like it was built by someone since the walls felt like polished marble, not a very common to see in these times.

i continued walking down the corridor poking my way though the place, excitement growing withing my being, i gulped as a sudden fear overcame my body. i began to tremble my feet failed me and i kneed onto the ground, what is this feeling? i though to myself.
i tryed to think of happy things but my minded clouded and the fear struck harder...

getting onto my feet i slowly fought my way across the narrow path that laid before me, each step getting harder, i felt like i was going to die from the pressure the fear ompossed in me, as i was about to faint i took the last step, the fear began to go away, my strength returned, i walked pacefully into the room, the dim light was coming from a small egg, on top of a column probably as tall as me, the egg gave out a dim whiteish light, immediately i felt the egg calling me. as if it knew i was coming...

i aproached the egg carefully, after what seemed a whole mile the egg was there now the light seemed weaker, it revealed its true color. the egg was black, i began to ask myself if it was really an egg since its apearence was polished like a gem, i discarded the hypothesis since it glowed a little.

i felt like touching the stone or egg, but i had a feeling this wasnt a good idea. mom would say that objects that looks obscure are usually dangerous, it was obscure alright. a black egg emanating white light i almost felt like there was a dark thing about this...

but at the same time i could feel the egg calling, like i needed to touch it. all i needed to do was touch it, just to reach my hand out and with one little finger poke it. but what if something terrible things happened if i touched it? what if a terrible beast comes out and kills me? or worse destroys my village, it was a bad situation the egg began to call me stronger now, i could almost hear a voice calling me, i couldn't hold it anymore. i lifted my hand, slowly worked its way to the egg, and like an instant i touched it feeling the hard stoney coldness. it didnt move, nor shined... nothing at all.

i sighed in relief... but my sigh was interrupted by a large rumbling sound, shaking the cave violently. it felt like the cliff was about to explode. i ran to the door but it was to late the entrance had collapsed now i was stuck inside that room...

i could feel the violent trembling get stronger i fell down near one of the ends of the cave, heart pumping faster as i felt my end was near, the cave would collapse with me inside, who would find me? what would my parents do? how would everyone react when they found out? i felt like crying right then...

but it was just that time the cave stopped shaking, i sighed like i never sighed before, it was like my lungs turned into pure muscle and sighed as strong as they could. it was to my surprise when i saw the egg floating on the air, now i had no doubts to how dark this egg was, maybe i could cook it so i could survive a little longer in this cave...

my thoughts were cut off when the egg began shining again stronger then before almost blinding me in its shining fury, i trying to look at what was going on but the light was to strong so i avoided my contact with it. after a few seconds the light faded and i looked at where the egg was, my jaws dropped as i looked at the most unexpected and amazing thing i have ever seen in my life...

continues on pt2
©2009 ~barduk4
:iconbarduk4:

Author's Comments

please be aware english is not my native language so this may not be as good is intended ^3^

anyways i've been creating some fictiong in my head and this is it i wrote it i tried making it in first person narrative to see how it comes out, and i may say so it looks better then the third person narrative style =S

anyways i would like it if anyone would give me some tips and comments so i could maybe improve, since i plan to be a writer when i do college ^^ thanks in advance

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:iconschemilix:
My main critique is... I suggest capitalising. t'll really make it look more professional.

Also, that little comment at the beginning? Just pop it in the description, makes it neater. : )

--
Down on yer knees, certain to please,
If you're a girl, give it a whirl,
If you're a lad, straighten yer nads!
If you want some whore-ific action,
Schemilix guarantees satisfaction.

The Game.
:iconbarduk4:
hmmmm yes i always had trouble with capital letters i'll try to work on that ^^ thx for the comment =D

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everything changes when you're called uncle ^^

dragons, fantasy, anthro.... what the heck am i???
:iconschemilix:
No problem at all. I'll check back in a while and have another read through if you like.

--
Down on yer knees, certain to please,
If you're a girl, give it a whirl,
If you're a lad, straighten yer nads!
If you want some whore-ific action,
Schemilix guarantees satisfaction.

The Game.
:icondannywoot:
u should write a book based on this story its very intresting i swear im not being sarcastic or something its really awesome :D
:iconbarduk4:
i plan to =D

who knows maybe in the future ^^

btw u know there are the other chapters right?

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everything changes when you're called uncle ^^

dragons, fantasy, anthro.... what the heck am i???
:iconcyndraofshadowclan:
Really good so far. Work on your english a bit and you'll get it :D

--
They say that stories always end in happy endings... But this isn't a story. It's life. Not all ending are happy. And not all stories are meant to be told. But this one is one of the lucky ones to be told~~ Clash of the Clans
:iconbarduk4:
it gets better ;)

this first parts of the story is to be reworked someday ^^

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everything changes when you're called uncle ^^

dragons, fantasy, anthro.... what the heck am i???
:iconcyndraofshadowclan:
cool

--
They say that stories always end in happy endings... But this isn't a story. It's life. Not all ending are happy. And not all stories are meant to be told. But this one is one of the lucky ones to be told~~ Clash of the Clans
:iconarthas972:
'Curiosity struck me like a hunter's arrow strikes a rabbit.'

You see the other interpretation of this? Curiosity killed the cat - or, in this case, the rabbit. Lol :P

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:[< I >]> Laughing Dragon
~Live for peace, fight with honor, love with dedication... and you shall never die~

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